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Saze
Theroshan
Theroshan
Saze

Posts : 16
Join date : 2008-05-06

Character sheet
Name: Saze
Race: Cimmerian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 12:00 pm

Name : Saze Missherd
Race : Cimmerian
Age : 19
Clan : Balance

Description : Saze is a tall male of 6ft , very strong build powerful , brown hazel eyes , short brown messy hair that covers most of his ears, quite a tanned skin tone, fights with a bow but also carrys a short dagger just incase the bow donít do the job, scars along the left side of his face showing that his up bringing hasnt been a very plesant one that his life has evolved around danger and killing is all he knows best,Saze is very quick on his feet sharp reflexes always ready to battle and defend his fellow friends.

Background : He Grew up in a rough village where fighting was the main priority, until the village was under attack by the Bandit tribe all they seeked was kills, kidnapping young children to create vicious killing machines brainwash there minds into thinking all that matters is war and Saze was not captured and escape he had to take care of himself from then, Saze started to improve his skills as a ranger to get back at the tribe and wanted to take after his father which was a famous ranger in the village. Unable to prove too his father his worth Saze now seeks his fortunes elsewhere. Though Saze does not talk much after the attack on his village he still shows no mercy when it comes to battle, Not one for the flash moves or show-boasting preferring the fast, silent kill.

7) Your characters reason to want to join
He's been moving around for to long and now have come to a hault and he wants somewere secure and safe to live, a place were everyone is treated equally believing in the same ideals. All working towards a common goal.
After being refused by many others and nowere to go he has turnt to The House Of The New Dawn hoping to be accepted into a safer enviroment.


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Thorak
Theroshan
Theroshan
Thorak

Posts : 3
Join date : 2008-05-07

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 12:18 pm

I think that your background is rather exciting. I can actualy picture what you are talking about in my head.
Look foward to playing with you!
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Lapis
Dorini of Lore
Dorini of Lore
Lapis

Posts : 195
Join date : 2008-04-06
Age : 50
Location : Sweden

Character sheet
Name: Lapis Nithotep
Race: Stygian
Clan: Lore

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 12:39 pm

Much better!

But you need to improve the english - to write
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Grow up in a rough village were fighting was the main priority, until the village was under attack by the Bandit tribe all they seek is killing and deaths taking young children to create vicious killing machines brainwash there minds into thinking all that matters is war and Saze was not captured and escape he had to take care of himself from then, Saze started to improve his skills as a ranger to get back at the tribe and wanted to take after his father which was a famous ranger in the village.
in ONE SENTENCE makes it impossible to understand without thinking really hard, at least for me as a swedish person.

sincerely
Lapis
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Sedrian
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Theroshan
Sedrian

Posts : 80
Join date : 2008-04-13
Age : 31
Location : England

Character sheet
Name: Sedrian Araveromon
Race: Nemedian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 12:44 pm

Lapis wrote:
Much better!

But you need to improve the english - to write
wrote:
Grow up in a rough village were fighting was the main priority, until the village was under attack by the Bandit tribe all they seek is killing and deaths taking young children to create vicious killing machines brainwash there minds into thinking all that matters is war and Saze was not captured and escape he had to take care of himself from then, Saze started to improve his skills as a ranger to get back at the tribe and wanted to take after his father which was a famous ranger in the village.
in ONE SENTENCE makes it impossible to understand without thinking really hard, at least for me as a swedish person.

sincerely
Lapis

Admittedly even i had a hard time understanding where alot of it was going, and im english.
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Saze
Theroshan
Theroshan
Saze

Posts : 16
Join date : 2008-05-06

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Name: Saze
Race: Cimmerian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 12:45 pm

Ok fair enough will do thanks Smile
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Alberich
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Alberich

Posts : 207
Join date : 2008-04-21
Age : 28
Location : Kent, England

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Name: Alberich
Race: Aesir
Clan: Nature

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 3:57 pm

Yes, much better than your last attempt.

Good luck with your application. Smile
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Balah
Balah
Varon kaldeer

Posts : 144
Join date : 2008-01-01
Age : 29
Location : England

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Name: Dorini Varon Kaldeer of War
Race: Cimmerian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 7:22 pm

Maybe not writen in best english. But the content is there and the story works . Much better than the last one. I hope you get in. Good luck with your application
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Rashad
Dathanar
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Rashad

Posts : 738
Join date : 2007-12-28
Age : 31

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Name: Rashad Mahdi
Race: Stygian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 8:23 pm

I don't know so much about the brainwashing but I've heard other stories of pirates kidnapping young children and then raising them as swashbucklers, making them very loyal to their captain and indeed quite merciless so that works. Personally I think this story would be alot more interesting if your character was actually captured by the tribe or group, and then their leader was killed, maybe a muteny and he escaped from there. Then lost being with a close knit group of people and possibly the command of superiors and thats why he seeks to join the New Dawn. That's just what came to me when I read it.

You don't have to change your backgund if you don't want to. I'll accept it.
I'm also changing your forum username to saze.
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Anari
Theroshan
Theroshan
Anari

Posts : 133
Join date : 2008-01-09
Location : England

Character sheet
Name: Haseo
Race: Stygian
Clan: Damak

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 9:38 pm

I like the name Saze

Haseo Out
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Khalid
Dorini of Damak
Dorini of Damak
Khalid

Posts : 163
Join date : 2007-12-28
Age : 36

Character sheet
Name: Khalid Osahar
Race: Stygian
Clan: Damak

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeThu May 08, 2008 11:07 pm

Welcome to the gang Saze-
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Saze
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Saze

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Join date : 2008-05-06

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Name: Saze
Race: Cimmerian
Clan: Balance

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PostSubject: Re: Josh Missherd   Josh Missherd Icon_minitimeFri May 09, 2008 1:38 pm

Thanks happy im in now, leaves me to relax and get to know the guild and the game itself Smile

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